Interesting song it sounds like a Christran song with the forgiveness of sins stuff personally its not my thing since im a witch but thanks for the post.
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Woof. This post contains some interesting themes... although (imho) human's ultimate destiny isn't with the earthly bound critters and concerns, but of higher ideals that can carry one's soul to a higher existence (not religious, jus sayin').
But I really came to comment on your last posted work (the Harry Potter fan fic). I thought the descriptions and course of events were well described and composed (a big plus). I'm a bit jealous of that.
Spell check and an effort to punctuate and capitalize in the final draft would be very important. I thought the sex scene at the end was okay, though it needed some paragraphs to break up the action, much like a film would with various shots. (How polite of the character to pull out and spunk on his belly!) A purvy piece, to be sure, with lots of action. It stands by itself; there wasn't many extraneous plot devices to lend itself to further additions.
Hmm, I hope I was helpful. Not used to literary reviews since high school.
Best wishes to you and yours this holiday!